Elsie I think that your blog is very
interesting and topical. I appreciate how you have taken a strong opposition to
a subject like this. Your inclusion of video's and interesting imagery makes
your blog an effective and enticing spectacle. Personally I do not hold a
strong opinion on 'child beauty pageants' but many of my ideas have now been
influenced by your blog. I like how your blog is at times informal as it
presents a uniquely personal touch. I agree with Natasha, that the inclusion of
hyperlinks would add another dimension to your blog. I also think that perhaps
a few more statistical facts could work well. Thank-you for focusing on a
controversial topic.
Patrick this is great! You have covered
a lot of points here yet the post is very cohesive. I think that the imagery is
really effective. I agree with your opinion that movie/ video game violence
does have an effect on people. It is an interesting point that perhaps violent
video games/ movies are more influential to viewers at a younger age. I think
that the link that you included is a great way to validate what you are saying.
Thank-you for this insightful post.
Wow
nick this is really interesting! I really liked how you have incorporated both
video and still imagery into your post. I never knew just how much of a predicament
this was. The hyperlinks you have used really blend seamlessly into your piece
of writing. I think this by blogging a piece about "families and futures
at risk" it really hits home with many readers and creates a more personel
dimension to your blog. The facts and figures that you have used support what
you are saying extremely well. Thank-you for covering such an important
subject.
Jack, I find your topic especially
interesting. With the issue of global warming constantly being covered is nice
that you have taken a different approach and with argued a solution. The above
piece of writing is super factual and statistical which I appreciate. I agree
with Patrick when he says that you have obviously researched this topic
thoroughly. You have also worked well to include your opinion which is at times
difficult. Hyperlinks could possibly be added to this post to make it more
interactive for the reader. All in all I really enjoyed reading this blog and I
think you have made some great points. It is effective how you have simplified
the information so that it reads clearly and effortlessly for the reader. I
especially like the line "People who use organic methods believe that
organic farming works in harmony with nature rather than against it".
Thanks Jack!
Davy this is so interesting!
I love how your blog is funny yet informative. I never truly grasped just how dangerous illegal downloading can be to the music industry, especially the future of up and coming artists. Unfortunately the future in preventing this does seem rather bleak due to the rapid advancement in technology! I think that the integration of hyperlinks within your blog is well-thought out. I really enjoyed the video's you posted and think they add a dynamic dimension to your blog. Your blog is very clever and I genuinely thoroughly enjoyed reading it so thank-you so much! Your comment on my blog was also very helpful.
I love how your blog is funny yet informative. I never truly grasped just how dangerous illegal downloading can be to the music industry, especially the future of up and coming artists. Unfortunately the future in preventing this does seem rather bleak due to the rapid advancement in technology! I think that the integration of hyperlinks within your blog is well-thought out. I really enjoyed the video's you posted and think they add a dynamic dimension to your blog. Your blog is very clever and I genuinely thoroughly enjoyed reading it so thank-you so much! Your comment on my blog was also very helpful.
Wow Ana! this is eye-opening. I never even
considered the d/Deaf population when is comes to disasters. Which is probably
a simple reflection on how ignorant society can truly be. I think that the
visual image you have chosen gives a certain authority to your post. I like
that you have used the rhetorical question 'Why?" to begin the second
paragraph as I think it relates what you are saying directly to the reader. I
do think jenette is accurate about the last paragraph, It possibly could be
more concluding, and would perhaps sum up what you are saying better if it did
not introduce more aspects of your topic. All in all however Ana this is one of
my favourite topics covered in class and I return enlightened after reading
your blog.
Hi Alex!
Your blog topic is very relevant and especially engaging. This particular post is effective as it concludes your entire blog and draws attention to your main points. I like how you have clearly expressed your views on the subject yet you have also stated the counter-argument. The image you have used in this post relates well to what you are talking about and shows the development in technology as well as social views. Your blog is well researched, and clear. Thank-you for choosing such a topical socio-political concern.
Your blog topic is very relevant and especially engaging. This particular post is effective as it concludes your entire blog and draws attention to your main points. I like how you have clearly expressed your views on the subject yet you have also stated the counter-argument. The image you have used in this post relates well to what you are talking about and shows the development in technology as well as social views. Your blog is well researched, and clear. Thank-you for choosing such a topical socio-political concern.
Eden! I really like this particular
post! Its so relevant and you have delivered a range of exceptionally current
examples. I like that you have used examples from all range of media types such
as News paper articles, music videos, movies and television shows. I definitely
agree with you that we live in an age where young people are exposed to a
little too much of the world in an interestingly second-hand manner. Something
to keep in mind is that the children of war times were probably exposed to
violence in an immediate state, yet without an obscene about of media coverage
these visuals were not replayed over and over. Your choice of Kim Kardashian as
your visual image is so interesting as when I think about it 'Keeping up with
the Kardashian's' is a prime example of over-exposure, and desensitisation of
violence. Thank-you Eden!
Kelly Lithgow
Kelly Lithgow
Hey Rebecca!I really enjoyed reading this piece, you have chosen an especially topical subject to discuss. I like how you have included a graph to back up what you are saying and give the voice a sense of authority. You have clearly researched this topic thoroughly and have displayed this research in your post. To improve this post you should include links to other websites which either illustrate a similar view point to you or directly back up what you are saying. Also do you think technology is having a positive or negative affect on the children of today? This could be perhaps made more clear. All in all this is a great start Rebecca!
